tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6174598148916406027.post4135304289771570115..comments2021-01-21T08:29:58.836+01:00Comments on 8th Science 2010: Field Trip!ms.dhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00064622276445020773noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6174598148916406027.post-6456401678011656262010-05-14T11:52:14.816+02:002010-05-14T11:52:14.816+02:00Jacob - You have some great information about some...Jacob - You have some great information about some of the things we saw on our tour and throughout the museum. Be careful with your spelling and grammar, as you have quite a few errors throughout your writing. Also, you didn't really cover the planetarium enough - a major focus of this trip, nor did you cover the the planet walk we did to see Earth, Mercury, the Sun, Venus and Mars. This was the main point of the trip. Plus, you needed to relate some of this information to real life, as that is the new requirement for blogging in the fourth quarter. I did like your color use and the links to youtube (although two of them are to the same site). Overall, not bad - Ms. D.ms.dhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00064622276445020773noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6174598148916406027.post-37837771951226895922010-04-23T07:55:52.799+02:002010-04-23T07:55:52.799+02:00I loved this article, Jacob. It was a very intreig...I loved this article, Jacob. It was a very intreiguing article to read. I especially liked your photos and font color. I never knew there were dogs in Sputnik. I would suggest to add a few links to sites like NASA.gov or other astronomy links to learn about Sputnik more in depth. Great job overall; keep up the good work, dear.<br /><br />Love, <br /> Tvoj broj one fruendin.Lukehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00537598239577590830noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6174598148916406027.post-4903977043095472882010-04-23T07:51:05.852+02:002010-04-23T07:51:05.852+02:00This is a great account of the trip! It is very ob...This is a great account of the trip! It is very obvious that you listened and managed to recount all the informatioin in a very informative manner. Also, the youtube links are a great choice for this topic. One thing to improve on however, would be the layout because all the writing is bunched into large paragraphs which makes it a little hard to read. But, all in all, a wonderful job Jacob.<br /><br />Ines:)Ineshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13409221036186781724noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6174598148916406027.post-27498739068711708822010-04-22T18:35:59.404+02:002010-04-22T18:35:59.404+02:00I can see that you really listened to what everyon...I can see that you really listened to what everyone had to say during the trip, as you have a lot of information and details about everything that happened and was said. <br />On the other side, you should watch your spelling and sentence structure. A few commas and periods would be helpful. Pollo means chicken in Italian, so you wrote that the first spacecraft that landed on Moon was chicken 11. Also the name of the dog that was launched in space is not a misspelling of Rakia, but Laïka.<br />Finally, I'd like to thank you for being so precise in describing the trip, as it reminded me how much fun it actually was :)Danielhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14209160004194894152noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6174598148916406027.post-57287100621156243662010-04-22T17:36:38.412+02:002010-04-22T17:36:38.412+02:00good wok Jacob, you had included quite a lot of in...good wok Jacob, you had included quite a lot of information however you shouldn't have left so many spaces in between paragraphs and pictures and also you have copied twice the first youtube video links, otherwise good job.:)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6174598148916406027.post-18449644619185422772010-04-22T16:54:52.618+02:002010-04-22T16:54:52.618+02:00Good job Jacob! I like how you included some extra...Good job Jacob! I like how you included some extra information about Sputnik II. It's pretty cool that they sent a dog up! (: Funny that you mentioned me and the hamster wheel! You provided a lot of info in this post! However you could have been a bit more clear towards what the third picture is.<br />Over all well done!!<br />-Holly(:Hollyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14627544451776590020noreply@blogger.com